celebrating the reunion of their old friend "Dew";
The sparrows sang their song in a disturbed chorus,
But the song evolved in a soothing melody for the already shining atmosphere.
The kids added life to the surroundings ;
through their candy calls for their buddies,
Yeah !!! it was lovely to watch them go hand in hand around the small trees ...
A small number of elderly persons relaxed themselves
in this polite air;
Some quiet, some consulting, some conversing;
Perhaps employing their till date experiences.
I noticed a cute little girl accompanied by her Mother;
making their way to this attractive enviroment.
Settling on an artistically carved bench;
The Mother continued her talk with her lovely daughter ;
discussing the world ; peeling off the fruits for her .
I saw the girl asking something to her Mom;
Puzzled was my mind to see the Mother's eyes crying;
The Mother wiped off her silent tears and picked up her girl;
And went near a flower that had a sweet fragrance.
I failed to understand how to react at this painful sight...
The Child enjoyed the flower's fragrance ;
that smelt more sweet with her Mom's care for her;
I never gathered enough confidence to approach them;
Neither did I want to hurt the little girl's Mom;
whose own Child never knew;
that her Mom shed the tears for her...
Yeah !!! the little girl never saw this beautiful world ....
For her the world meant "Description through her Mom's words " ...
And we desire to roam places;
searching for more picturesque places in this world;
where for some the same world is ..
"A black room with garlands of words "....
~Abhi
30 comments:
Me first this time
very touchin one But i still see no rhyming scheme
@asif
ha u just beat me to it
#Asif
Yes !!! u beat HP this time :)
#sneh
Thanks !!!
I repeat.. I try to narrate and not to sing ...
Good Post Mate!!
Cheers,
HP
Some quite, some consulting, some conversing
I think you meant to say quiet??
Cheers,
HP
#HP
was in a hurry for words;
ne ways mistake rectified Mr.Vocabulary !! :)
Yeh Hamara Farz hain...
Cheers,
HP
#Abhi
i got this one :)
gr8 naration dude
#Abhi
Good one dude.
I feel this one started of very nicely but got very much emotional towards the end.
I feel this a common trend tht u follow in ur posts.
Try to change the theme a bit, if u can..
Am not sayin its not good, but you can improve. :))))
Try something jovial next time, life is too short to be sad. :)))
it's just a comment, forget it/use it, it's upto u. :))))
njoi
Kurt
@kurt
Thanks for the words ...
Comments noted !! will try to write on
some jolly things in next post.
#Ziom
Thank you !!
Jolly-Jolly..
Here's a lolly
For Miss Polly...
Cheers,
HP
#HP
Shut up u UnHoly
do me a favor, lets play Holi,
While i eat Chicken Rolli,
u eat paneer rolli,
i know this comment will win the highest boli(bid),
ppl if ur head spins, take a goli.
njoi
Kurt
HP and Kurt prove they haven't lost their crappy touch, yeah not yet.
Anyways Abhi it was good, I agree to kurt your posts get emotional.
Kurt,
wheres ur next post??
Lekar Teri Goli
Duniyaa Ho gayi hain Bholi
Chad jaa ab tu Sooli
Cheers,
HP
Chad jaaonga main Sooli,
Kyunki mere paas hain 10 by 10 ki Kholi..
Allab, ab to bhar de meri Jholi..
Cheers,
HP
Yes Ppl,
I know I am being pathetic but then you would say, I am being just me :-)
Cheers,
HP
# HP / kurt
Thanks for all the rhymes and what so ever :))
# Asif
Thanks ... Yes, point noted ... will definetly try on some other themes in next posts.
@abhi
grand shud be the entry i believe..
newez nice post, keep up the gud work, and u can do whtever poetry u like as long as we dont find those crappy HP aand ziom combinations , i freaked out reading the polly wali peom HP just wrote! cudn't gather the courage to read comments ne further than that!
newez very slow n smooth this one, a real nice piece of work dude Keep it up.
@HP
mera gussa abhi tak thanda nahin hua hai!
@Matz,
Karo Na Gussa,
Warna Padeag Ghoossa,
Then poochoge ki Who is Abdul Moosa?
:-)
Cheers,
HP
#mattu
Thanks Buddy !!!
Even i went / gng crazy with those striking rhymes .. God knows what is the source for HP and Kurt .
#hp
Mr. CTC .. CTC !!!
Chow,
Abhi.
Life is not Crap
Its actually a Trap
When our energies Sap
We take a Nap
:-)
Cheers,
HP
hey dude...
good post amazing..n u know the best part of it..
"A black room with garlands of words" says all abt the pain, the mistries n all the thngs that are hidden for us to reveal..
nice one..
bye
mojindro
#mojindro
Thanks Buddy :)
Chow,
Abhi
hey dude..
its remind me of my school days...
when i kept shouting on my mother n she(the most loving person on this earth)just listen me n let it go without a word..
now i really feel guilty of my actions n whenever get a chance i always remind her that she is the most loving person in my life......
#shruti
Even I remember some of my days wen i used to talk to my Mom in high pitch but at the end of the day .. I feel like being hanged .. but then .. Mom understands her kids nd thatz wht matters .. :)
#vibhor
Thanks for ur inputs Dude :)
You pysche me out buddy ! Amazin scribbling :)
Surprised (you are a software professional) but truly impressive(poetic talent)!!
Am sure many would shed silent tears when they read these penned thoughts of yours!
Continue bloggin ! Hope to see your artistic brain at work again..:-))
Cheers !
Anu
Hey Anu
Thanks for ur words ... buddy !!!!
I feel honoured :))
Some more themes under construction .. will write soon .
Chow,
Abhi.
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